In Te Ngahere we have been doing a piece of writing that the teachers need to level.
This is why we had to write it. I did my writing about dirt bike riding. I was riding up the hill with four boys
and then hit a huge bump and flipped off. We went to a track with a huge ramp halfway up the ramp the
bike run out of gas and I rolled down the ramp. I think I did well at explaining what happened. I think I can
do better at add detail into my writing. My writing is still a draft because I haven't finished it.
This is why we had to write it. I did my writing about dirt bike riding. I was riding up the hill with four boys
and then hit a huge bump and flipped off. We went to a track with a huge ramp halfway up the ramp the
bike run out of gas and I rolled down the ramp. I think I did well at explaining what happened. I think I can
do better at add detail into my writing. My writing is still a draft because I haven't finished it.
Dirt Bike Riding
When me and Fonz went to russell we went to a farm. When we made it to the farm we all meet each other
the farm was all boys but only two girls two boys names were Zack and cody. After meeting each other we
went dirt bike riding with a man named Mike. Mike told us about the farm and how to use the bikes and
Mike told us were all the tracks were around the farm. Mike took us to some places were we could ride
around until we went back to the house just before we went back I went up a step hill and the bike run out
of gas and the bike flip over me and I was lying on the ground. When we went back I hopped on the back
of Mike's bike and we went back and red around the track. When we were riding around the track I got a
new bike and when I was riding a boy named Zack stopped and i crashed into his back tyre and fell into
the mud. When I got up and red up a huge hill and fell off and rolled down the hill when we were finished
I stopped and flipped off the handle bars. The next day we went kayaking and we did the mud run.
The next day we were going to kayak to the place were we done the mud run we were kayaking until we
stopped and had a swim. When we were having a swim I got mud thrown in my face and when we went to
do the mud run I done a bomb off the tree into the mud because whoever got the mudest got the first
shower. When we were doing the mud run Zack losted his shoes and I was the second one to finish and we
fond shoes and zack put them on because he losted his. When we found the way back to the farm we
weren't aloud to have a shower so we washed off with the hoes and then we had some cheese on toast and
then me and fonz went home after two or three days.
the farm was all boys but only two girls two boys names were Zack and cody. After meeting each other we
went dirt bike riding with a man named Mike. Mike told us about the farm and how to use the bikes and
Mike told us were all the tracks were around the farm. Mike took us to some places were we could ride
around until we went back to the house just before we went back I went up a step hill and the bike run out
of gas and the bike flip over me and I was lying on the ground. When we went back I hopped on the back
of Mike's bike and we went back and red around the track. When we were riding around the track I got a
new bike and when I was riding a boy named Zack stopped and i crashed into his back tyre and fell into
the mud. When I got up and red up a huge hill and fell off and rolled down the hill when we were finished
I stopped and flipped off the handle bars. The next day we went kayaking and we did the mud run.
The next day we were going to kayak to the place were we done the mud run we were kayaking until we
stopped and had a swim. When we were having a swim I got mud thrown in my face and when we went to
do the mud run I done a bomb off the tree into the mud because whoever got the mudest got the first
shower. When we were doing the mud run Zack losted his shoes and I was the second one to finish and we
fond shoes and zack put them on because he losted his. When we found the way back to the farm we
weren't aloud to have a shower so we washed off with the hoes and then we had some cheese on toast and
then me and fonz went home after two or three days.
Hello Rikki-Dean my name is Mia and I am from Kawakawa Primary. I liked the part about when you went on a kayak because going on kayak sounds fun and that the point that you went with a friend is even better. Don't have much to say but go check out my learning at https://kpsmiat.blogspot.com/
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Sup Rikki-Dean It's your bro Daniel from Kawakawa Primary. I'm a year 8 and 12 years old. I liked reading your story cause its got some pretty good vocabulary in it. The dirt biking sounds mean as and the kayaking. Oh well anyways you can go check my blog at http://kpsdanielc.blogspot.com/
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